William Carlos Williams Experiment

This is a poem by William Carlos Williams:

This Is Just To Say

I have eaten
the plums
that were in
the icebox

and which
you were probably
saving
for breakfast

Forgive me
they were delicious
so sweet
and so cold

And this is my version (which my father thinks is quite hilarious. i was just writing quickly and this is what i came up with):

thought I’d say

that
I don’t want to leave

but you know that
after what happened
with the serving
spoons

we can’t both stay

here